Hello it,s Ashley i really liked the way you described what it felt like at camp and what you saw,hear,feel but i think you schould work on making more slieds and puting in more detail.
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Nice writing work
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ReplyDeleteHello it,s Ashley i really liked the way you described what it felt like at camp and what you saw,hear,feel but i think you schould work on making more slieds and puting in more detail.
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